Already on crutches how many more pieces would you break me into?
Already bruised by the nature’s call how much more pain would you put me through?
I have seen the rise I have seen the fall still we lived as one
I gave you a name I gave you my care
But you treat me as a cake, one for everyone to share
You are choking me now; it’s hard for me to breathe
I dreamed of us but ended up a victim of your greed
The “me” has strangled the “we”
And it’s hard to let go free
Lets switch places live me for a while
I am sick of living in denial
Don’t cut my wings I want to fly
Don’t rip my heart
I don’t want to die

Nice english

thank you !!

more comments would be appreciated !!

Oie jjyyaaapuuu Kaha baat saris ?

good job....nice one

ऒहॊ कृपा जी,
हजुर के सारो राम्रो हो !!!

आज चै "नाज ब्रो" भन्दा मेरो नजर पर्यो है केटि मा !!!

@biragi tero name sunera malai hasnu man lagyo !!
tuladhar lai jyapu bhanne lai ek jhaapu hanu jastyo lagyo
thuikka tann jasto neech soch rakhne manche pani hudo riacha
aru le dukkha garera lekheko poem kasko sareko bhandi hidne tan bahula richa !!!
aja lai atti!! tero mukh bata ramro ta aas gardina naramro feri lekhyo bhane tanlai thik garna pachi pani hatidina !!
RUMI......

@rumi. I kno u r good at other things ( everybody is good at atleast a couple of things ) . But this poem/Kabita chai Timro baas ko kura Haina hai. Ever heard of rhyme ? So please use ur energy at what you are good at and don't waste it here. And @prajwal bhai, Kabita bhaneko ta sweet hunt paryo ni, khallo hoina. Timro kabita padta ta Nepali kabi haru ra matribhumi Kai badnam bhaye jasto lagyo, tesaile negative comments lekheko.
Disclaimer : rumi baini ko ramro profile pic dekhera naram boleko, katai patti halcha ki bhanne aash ma. Boka ta parryo. Sajha ka boka bandhu haru najhamti halnu hola ma mathi bhusyaha kukur haru jastai.

राम्रो छ कविता.

Women's desires must be taken seriously. Society collapse where women are unhappy.

@prajwal to start your poem with TWO "already". ? A big no no. And to start each lines with "I" ??? No No No No No Nooooooooooooooooo

@bairagi bro timro naam sunera nepal nai bairag bha jasto cha k ho aru ko poem lai jpt bhanchai n what hell jhyapu ???kaslai jhyapu bhaneko bro afu le lekhna sakdaina bhandai ma aru ko creation lai jpt nabhanda ramro huncha naam pani bairagi manche ko sochai ta jhan khattam bairag raicha...this poem is what currently happening in nepal so u betta back off dude

yeah this poem is about the contemporary situation of nepal. it's good with knowledgeable & inspiring. kudos.
i wonder why can't ppl can't appreciate others work. If u can't write good of others than don't write bad comments. This shows ur class. And u small head, u got no right to call others jyapu or whatsoeva. do u have any proof from where did he plagiarized, biraghi ?

kasto naramro kabita ... malai ta maan parena hai sorry

To set the record straight through this poem I am expressing my honest opinion about what my country is going through right now because I have been here all these while to witness all this ups and downs Nepal is facing right now and it is nice to get the feed backs and some not so nice one I than every one for their time. My sole purpose to posting this to sajha. Com is because the caption itself says bringing nepali communities together and I felt that most of the users have stayed away from home so they would feel the severity of the situation in Nepal. I got feed backs as well I thank everyone for that. However, I expected comment regarding just the writing not anything else. Frankly speaking I am specially offended by some guy named bairagi kaila maila whatever his name is for your kind information this is my original creation and have been writing for the past 15 years whatever I have written is my own. And I come from a place where there is zero tolerance for plagiarism and sad that you staying abroad surely in the US does not know shit about Plagiarism. Now I again repeat a line I have mentioned above I just wanted people to comment on the material not anything else and you SIR come from nowhere like you are some hot shot MR Captain America and call me a jyapu. Dude you must be somewhere from mars or something. YOU Mr don’t need to worry my cast class or religion and I am not here to advertise about my religion or my personal stuffs. Honestly speaking for me you’re a frekin racist. I don’t need to clarify to you whether I am a madhesi newari bahun or anything else. I am a nepali first and my country is in trouble and I feel bad because I was there when it was struck by the earthquake. I have seen people die I have seen people get hurt. I have seen houses fall off. I myself have slept on the grounds for weaks. I have seen the riot I am living in the country where there is a vlocked imposed by india that is sucking the life out of the people of Nepal with no fule no electricity no food and essentials and the economy of the country is in ruins. And last but not the least Mr Bairaag you must know that this ma bahun ma chettri thing that was planted by the Maoists a decade ago has led to the riots that is currently going on in the Madhesh. And as far as your last comment goes Mr Bairaag I am glad that you focused on my writing this time and I wanna tell you that poetry is the only discipline in literature that does not follow any kind of grammar it is a free writing and it is all about expression your thoughts and it does not matter what ever way one start And to end it all up thank you @rumi Shakya @King Joshi @ Jaysmi @ Kripa for standing up for me you all rock.

@chaurey ji तपाईलाई कविता मन नपरे पनि केहि छैन सबैलाई मन पर्ने पर्छ भन्ने पनि त होइन आफ्नो विचार रख्दिनु भयो त्यसको लागि धेरै धेरै धन्यबाद बरु के पो मन परेन भन्दिनु भए राम्रो हुन्थ्यो

It's a timely and contextual expression. Anonymous people who are unsatisfied with their lives will take every opportunity to attack anyone they can hiding behind their hidden names to feel good about their pathetic lives. You can just sympathize with their sorry asses.

la hera maile RACE ko card fyakne bittikai kasari jyaapu samudaya oiri lageko. Nepal yehi manasthiti le garda bigreko ho. timi haru le kahilyai yehi manasthiti le pidit Nepali sarkari office dhayeka chau ? Racism ko meaning maile timile jyaapu bhanyo, timile malai bamsi, gorkhe, madhesi bhanyo bhaane hoina. yo nam dine lai ta ma identity thanchu. Asli Racism ta tyo manasthiti ho jo aafno jatko bhayo bhane aankha ra dimag baandh garera support garne ra arko jaat ko bhayo bhane aankh ra dimag bandha garera ghor birodh garne
@prajwal welcome to America. here your race, caste, etc nothing matters. only thing that sells is "your quality product". if you have good product, it will sell, otherwise it wont. . yaha ka kale haru pani yehi victim mentality le garda ahile samma agadi badna na sakeko ho. aba timro kabita lai nai herau na. timi lai desh ko maya nai lagcha bhane simple paragraph ma lekha. everybody will appreciate it. aba tal na betal ko kabita lekhera huncha. na choice of words thik cha, na rhyme cha, na whole body of work nai thik cha. kabita ta salala bageko nadi jasto hunu parcha, intensity ko flow hunu parcha. aba timi lai kabita lekhna aundaina bhandaima kabita ko paribhasa nai badal dine ??
timro low self confidence boost garna sabai ko wah wah chahina lai kabita lekheko ho bhane good for you

i have already mentioned above that if anyone posts anything if anyone about what i write it will be appreciated but u crossed the line and that was not well received. what ever it is i do not care what ever you think and it is not compulsory that every one has to like what i have to write and i do not write it to please you. timilai maile lekheko kura man parena style man parena bhane mlai kei bhanmu chaina sabailai man parcha bhanne jarurat pani chaina afno afno herai ko kura ho you gave me ur honest opinion. i am not here to start an argument about anything or i am here to talk about any kind of personal stuffs and congratulations that you have a better understanding thank you for your comments !!

@bairagi ko jhyapu sab jhyapu orliyo bhandai chau ....gaun ko pakhe us k gako afule afu lai k soche cha hou nepal ma failure vara bedeshma lukna jane manche le nepal n nepali lai k bujhcha n mind with ur words jhyapu. jhyapu bhanne pani manche ho they earn everything with their own. dont u dare discriminate other.... for me ur a BIG FAT LOSER PAAAKHE... I salute ppl like u with my middle finger....